From ff0202f2899861f2f640ffe02a5ae055c12aba0e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: onpon4 Date: Sun, 14 Jun 2015 00:14:36 -0400 Subject: [PATCH] More dialog tweaks --- data/brief1.txt | 4 ++-- data/brief10.txt | 4 ++-- data/brief11.txt | 2 +- data/brief12.txt | 4 ++-- data/brief15.txt | 4 ++-- data/brief16.txt | 2 +- data/brief17.txt | 2 +- data/brief3.txt | 8 ++++---- data/brief4.txt | 4 ++-- data/brief5.txt | 4 ++-- data/brief6.txt | 2 +- data/brief7.txt | 10 ++++++---- data/brief8.txt | 2 +- data/brief9.txt | 4 ++-- data/cutscene0.dat | 2 +- data/cutscene1.dat | 2 +- data/cutscene2.dat | 8 +++----- data/cutscene4.dat | 2 +- data/cutscene6.dat | 2 +- data/script11.txt | 34 ++++++++++++++-------------------- data/script23.txt | 2 +- data/script26.txt | 2 +- 22 files changed, 52 insertions(+), 58 deletions(-) diff --git a/data/brief1.txt b/data/brief1.txt index 8d68f9d..2f48c2d 100644 --- a/data/brief1.txt +++ b/data/brief1.txt @@ -4,7 +4,7 @@ Hey, boy! You still owe me money for the Firefly I stole for you! But instead, I FACE_CHRIS Oh? That's the job I contracted you to do, was it not? FACE_KRASS -I know, but you will still owe me money for the Firefly. Do this job, and also collect $500, and we will call it quits. And if you die... Well, I guess the ship was not worth stealing! HA HA HA!! +I know, but this way we can resolve your debt right now. Do this job, and also collect $500, and we will call it quits. And if you die... Well, I guess the ship was not worth stealing! HA HA HA! FACE_CHRIS -As usual, you take me too lightly, Krass. Very well. +As usual, you take me too lightly, Krass. diff --git a/data/brief10.txt b/data/brief10.txt index 933a01e..d27a157 100644 --- a/data/brief10.txt +++ b/data/brief10.txt @@ -1,5 +1,5 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_SID -A WEAPCO scientist just ran off in an escape pod. If we capture him, we may be able to get some information about Mordor. +A WEAPCO scientist just ran off in an escape pod and hidden in the asteroid belt. If we capture him, we may be able to get some information about Mordor. FACE_CHRIS -Alright. I'm going after him. +I'm on it. diff --git a/data/brief11.txt b/data/brief11.txt index a7ea4c0..725721f 100644 --- a/data/brief11.txt +++ b/data/brief11.txt @@ -4,6 +4,6 @@ I've received word that the slaves we rescued have started a rebellion. Looks li FACE_PHOEBE WEAPCO has an automated mining ship in orbit around Elamale. How about we take it out and cause some confusion? FACE_CHRIS -I like that idea. +I like that idea! FACE_SID It'll work, but be careful. diff --git a/data/brief12.txt b/data/brief12.txt index 906efd8..203010d 100644 --- a/data/brief12.txt +++ b/data/brief12.txt @@ -1,9 +1,9 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_CHRIS -What have you managed to find out about that experimental fighter? +What have you found out about that experimental fighter? FACE_SID It's got some kind of cloaking device that makes it invisible to radar. Could prove hard to track down. FACE_CHRIS -I'll scout the system and see if I can intercept it. +I'll just have to run around the system until I run into it. FACE_SID It's likely to run away if you engage it in battle, so try and do as much damage to it as possible. diff --git a/data/brief15.txt b/data/brief15.txt index a00a6f4..7021404 100644 --- a/data/brief15.txt +++ b/data/brief15.txt @@ -2,6 +2,6 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_SID Seems like taking out that WEAPCO mining ship wasn't such a good idea. The Ore it collected from those asteroids is needed in weapon production. FACE_CHRIS -I guess I'll have to mine some myself, then. +Damn! I guess that means I'll have to mine some myself, then, huh? FACE_SID -Be careful, Chris. Your weapons weren't designed for that sort of work and could have some devastating results. +Yes. Be careful, Chris. Your weapons weren't designed for that sort of work and could have some devastating results. diff --git a/data/brief16.txt b/data/brief16.txt index 360b37d..d11ad0f 100644 --- a/data/brief16.txt +++ b/data/brief16.txt @@ -1,5 +1,5 @@ Krass Tyler FACE_CHRIS -Hey, Krass! I need you to help us out with something. Phoebe and Ursula are taking out key WEAPCO plants. Can you help me create a diversion? +Hey, Krass! I need you to help us out with something. Phoebe and Ursula are taking out key WEAPCO plants. Can you help me create a diversion by wreaking havoc a little bit away from that? FACE_KRASS Sure, I can help you out, boy. But I'll be needing my fee... diff --git a/data/brief17.txt b/data/brief17.txt index 064259a..afed732 100644 --- a/data/brief17.txt +++ b/data/brief17.txt @@ -4,4 +4,4 @@ I've remembered something. WEAPCO is transporting some high level personnel to P FACE_SID This could be really important to our success in Sol. I'll need some cover so I can disable that ship. FACE_CHRIS -Got it. +You got it! diff --git a/data/brief3.txt b/data/brief3.txt index 5756fae..43a3264 100644 --- a/data/brief3.txt +++ b/data/brief3.txt @@ -1,10 +1,10 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_CHRIS -Missile boats? +Wow! Missile boats? FACE_SID -Yeah, looks like WEAPCO has decided that in order to gain better control of Spirit they'll have to bring out the big guns! +Yup. Looks like WEAPCO is starting to take notice of your actions. FACE_CHRIS -Wow! Any more information on them? +Sounds like fun! This will really put the Firefly's fighting ability to the test! FACE_SID -A single missile boats carries enough rockets to level most major cities. Try not to face them head-on and keep your distance. +Please be careful, Chris. A single missile boat carries enough rockets to level most major cities. Try not to face them head-on, and keep your distance. diff --git a/data/brief4.txt b/data/brief4.txt index 24c82e5..ca3e929 100644 --- a/data/brief4.txt +++ b/data/brief4.txt @@ -1,8 +1,8 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_SID -We're going to have to clear the mine field that's been building up here recently. I have a feeling that WEAPCO have deployed some miners in the area and are testing the effectiveness of the field. Removing the mines will help interplanetary traffic to start up again. +We're going to have to get rid of the mine deployment unit around Joldar. The minefield is stopping interplanetary traffic. FACE_CHRIS -Any fighters? +Sounds kind of boring. Any fighters? FACE_SID Not at the moment, but that doesn't mean they won't turn up. Be very careful of those mines! They'll only explode when they encounter a ship that's not transmitting a WEAPCO signal. Shoot them down if they get in your way. diff --git a/data/brief5.txt b/data/brief5.txt index 30c4c3d..e75db85 100644 --- a/data/brief5.txt +++ b/data/brief5.txt @@ -1,7 +1,7 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_SID -CHRIS! We've got a major problem here! WEAPCO has decided to stop our resistance by destroying Spirit! The explosion will incinerate everything in the system! You've only got about 3 minutes to destroy the frigate before it's in range! +We've got a major problem here! WEAPCO has decided to stop our resistance by destroying Spirit! The explosion will incinerate everything in the system! You've got to destroy that frigate before it gets in range! FACE_CHRIS -Damn! I'll get right on that, then! +Damn! I'll get right on it, then! FACE_SID We're all counting on you, Chris! But just remember - They didn't call that thing "Star Killer" just because it sounded nice! diff --git a/data/brief6.txt b/data/brief6.txt index 49236e4..dfd47ea 100644 --- a/data/brief6.txt +++ b/data/brief6.txt @@ -1,6 +1,6 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_SID -WEAPCO has many slaves in this system. If we free a large number of them, it might help to spark a rebellion. I estimate that we will need to rescue around 250 to make a difference. +As you know, WEAPCO has many slaves in this system. If we free a large number of them, it might help to spark a rebellion. I estimate that we will need to rescue around 250 to make a difference. FACE_CHRIS Most of the slaves are working in ore mines, aren't they? FACE_SID diff --git a/data/brief7.txt b/data/brief7.txt index 0be1510..6eac2d9 100644 --- a/data/brief7.txt +++ b/data/brief7.txt @@ -1,7 +1,9 @@ (unknown) FACE_PHOEBE -Help! This is an SOS! Can anyone hear me?! I was intercepted by a large WEAPCO force near Nerod! I'm in need of assistance! -FACE_SID -You should probably go help her out, Chris. +Help! This is an SOS! Can anyone hear me?! FACE_CHRIS -Obviously. +I'm hearing you loud and clear! What's up? +FACE_PHOEBE +Oh, thank God! I was intercepted by a large WEAPCO force near Nerod! I'm in need of assistance! +FACE_CHRIS +I'm on my way! diff --git a/data/brief8.txt b/data/brief8.txt index 5361fbe..1357905 100644 --- a/data/brief8.txt +++ b/data/brief8.txt @@ -2,4 +2,4 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_SID I've just received another SOS. This one is coming from a supply craft carrying essential medical supplies. FACE_CHRIS -I'm on it. +Alright, Tell 'em I'm on my way. diff --git a/data/brief9.txt b/data/brief9.txt index cbd4647..48e57b2 100644 --- a/data/brief9.txt +++ b/data/brief9.txt @@ -1,8 +1,8 @@ Sid Wilson FACE_SID -I need some resources before we leave, it'll make life a lot easier in Mordor. Problem is that the parts are hoarded by WEAPCO. +I need some resources before we leave, it'll make life a lot easier in Mordor. Problem is that WEAPCO hoards these parts. FACE_CHRIS -Where can we get the parts, then? +Where can we get them, then? FACE_SID There's a big shipment of them nearby. I can disable the supply craft carrying them; I just need you to give me some cover while I do it. FACE_CHRIS diff --git a/data/cutscene0.dat b/data/cutscene0.dat index 38798bf..98fc271 100644 --- a/data/cutscene0.dat +++ b/data/cutscene0.dat @@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ gfx/spirit.jpg FACE_NONE While escaping with his newly acquired Firefly, Chris Bainfield is intercepted by a WEAPCO patrol... FACE_CHRIS -Damn, these things just won't give up, will they? +These things just won't give up, will they? FACE_CHRIS What a dilemma! I'm not all that familiar with this ship's controls, but I can't let this patrol reach my rendezvous point... FACE_CHRIS diff --git a/data/cutscene1.dat b/data/cutscene1.dat index 0de442f..79c9d57 100644 --- a/data/cutscene1.dat +++ b/data/cutscene1.dat @@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ gfx/sol.jpg FACE_NONE A few hours later, in the Sol system, news has already spread of Chris Bainfield's heroic actions. The commander of WEAPCO's navy considers his options. FACE_KLINE -The Emperor will not be pleased! Spirit is now a free star system thanks to that interfering rebel pilot! +The Emperor will not be pleased. Spirit is now a free star system thanks to that interfering rebel pilot. FACE_KLINE It was reported that he was able to take down one of our most powerful frigates in under 3 minutes! FACE_KLINE diff --git a/data/cutscene2.dat b/data/cutscene2.dat index 13fe0bb..9c0b79d 100644 --- a/data/cutscene2.dat +++ b/data/cutscene2.dat @@ -24,10 +24,8 @@ Aren't there a lot of WEAPCO slaves in this system? FACE_SID Correct. It's got one of the highest mortality rates in the galaxy. FACE_CHRIS -Well, that's no good! We'll have to do something about that, then. +You think we can use that to our advantage? FACE_SID -Just remember that we won't be in Spirit anymore and you may run into WEAPCO patrols while travelling. +I think so. I'll come up with a plan of action. Just remember that we won't be in Spirit anymore and you may run into WEAPCO patrols while travelling. FACE_CHRIS -We may actually be able to use that to our advantage. You thinking what I'm thinking? -FACE_SID -I sure am. I'll come up with a plan of action. +Sounds like fun! diff --git a/data/cutscene4.dat b/data/cutscene4.dat index a1c16ad..dd389f1 100644 --- a/data/cutscene4.dat +++ b/data/cutscene4.dat @@ -18,7 +18,7 @@ gfx/eyananth.jpg 14 -1 0 0 0 FACE_SID -Chris, what happened?! Are you okay?! +What happened back there, Chris? All of our communications were jammed. FACE_CHRIS We took down the WEAPCO mining vessel and then I was jumped by a man claiming to be Kline Kethlan. FACE_SID diff --git a/data/cutscene6.dat b/data/cutscene6.dat index 6713c12..6fb950e 100644 --- a/data/cutscene6.dat +++ b/data/cutscene6.dat @@ -21,7 +21,7 @@ FACE_CHRIS Sorry folks, we just lost our bargaining chip. FACE_SID Knowing how cut throat WEAPCO is I doubt it would have made a difference anyway. -FACE_CHRIS +FACE_SID Sol is going to be difficult. I've heard they have a lot of heavy defenses on the outer planets. FACE_PHOEBE We'll have to start there then. diff --git a/data/script11.txt b/data/script11.txt index 026f279..8f8ffdb 100644 --- a/data/script11.txt +++ b/data/script11.txt @@ -4,61 +4,55 @@ FACE_PHOEBE 0 Ummm... something about this doesn't look right! They should be offering more resistance than this! --6 +-8 FACE_PHOEBE -1 0 DAMMIT! It's a trap! Come on, Chris, we have to leave NOW!! --7 +-9 -1 16 128 @none@ --12 +-13 FACE_SID -1 0 Chris, wh... --14 +-15 FACE_KLINE -1 0 So finally I meet the man who has been causing us so much trouble! --19 +-20 FACE_CHRIS -1 0 -Why can't I... +I see you've jammed up my warp drive. Who are you? --21 -FACE_KLINE --1 -0 -Don't bother trying to run away like your friend there. I've nullified your warp drive. - --26 -FACE_CHRIS --1 -0 -Who are you? - --29 +-25 FACE_KLINE -1 0 I am Kline Kethlan. And I am here to put to a stop to your worthless little crusade! +-31 +FACE_CHRIS +-1 +0 +Kline Kethlan, huh? You sure sound confident. + -36 FACE_KLINE -1 0 Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide, and no one to help you! This will certainly be interesting... --41 +-42 -1 15 -20 diff --git a/data/script23.txt b/data/script23.txt index 905960d..2f6e941 100644 --- a/data/script23.txt +++ b/data/script23.txt @@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ I'm a mercenary, what do you expect?! WEAPCO hired me to do a job, just like you FACE_CHRIS -1 0 -Good point. I guess I was a fool to expect anything else. +Good point. It would be foolish to expect anything else. 25 FACE_KRASS diff --git a/data/script26.txt b/data/script26.txt index 5795fb9..96374ee 100644 --- a/data/script26.txt +++ b/data/script26.txt @@ -2,7 +2,7 @@ FACE_CHRIS -1 0 -WEAPCO is finished, Kline! You have nowhere to run, nowhere to hide, and no one to help you. +WEAPCO is finished, Kethlan! You have nowhere to run, nowhere to hide, and no one to help you. 8 FACE_KLINE