More dialog tweaks

2015-06-14 00:14:36 -04:00 · 2015-06-14 00:14:36 -04:00 · ff0202f289
parent 19f20bf7e4
commit ff0202f289
22 changed files with 52 additions and 58 deletions
--- a/data/brief1.txt
+++ b/data/brief1.txt
@ -4,7 +4,7 @@ Hey, boy! You still owe me money for the Firefly I stole for you! But instead, I
 FACE_CHRIS
 Oh? That's the job I contracted you to do, was it not?
 FACE_KRASS
-I know, but you will still owe me money for the Firefly. Do this job, and also collect $500, and we will call it quits. And if you die... Well, I guess the ship was not worth stealing! HA HA HA!!
+I know, but this way we can resolve your debt right now. Do this job, and also collect $500, and we will call it quits. And if you die... Well, I guess the ship was not worth stealing! HA HA HA!
 FACE_CHRIS
-As usual, you take me too lightly, Krass. Very well.
+As usual, you take me too lightly, Krass.

--- a/data/brief10.txt
+++ b/data/brief10.txt
@ -1,5 +1,5 @@
 Sid Wilson
 FACE_SID
-A WEAPCO scientist just ran off in an escape pod. If we capture him, we may be able to get some information about Mordor.
+A WEAPCO scientist just ran off in an escape pod and hidden in the asteroid belt. If we capture him, we may be able to get some information about Mordor.
 FACE_CHRIS
-Alright. I'm going after him.
+I'm on it.
--- a/data/brief11.txt
+++ b/data/brief11.txt
@ -4,6 +4,6 @@ I've received word that the slaves we rescued have started a rebellion. Looks li
 FACE_PHOEBE
 WEAPCO has an automated mining ship in orbit around Elamale. How about we take it out and cause some confusion?
 FACE_CHRIS
-I like that idea.
+I like that idea!
 FACE_SID
 It'll work, but be careful.
--- a/data/brief12.txt
+++ b/data/brief12.txt
@ -1,9 +1,9 @@
 Sid Wilson
 FACE_CHRIS
-What have you managed to find out about that experimental fighter?
+What have you found out about that experimental fighter?
 FACE_SID
 It's got some kind of cloaking device that makes it invisible to radar. Could prove hard to track down.
 FACE_CHRIS
-I'll scout the system and see if I can intercept it.
+I'll just have to run around the system until I run into it.
 FACE_SID
 It's likely to run away if you engage it in battle, so try and do as much damage to it as possible.
--- a/data/brief15.txt
+++ b/data/brief15.txt
@ -2,6 +2,6 @@ Sid Wilson
 FACE_SID
 Seems like taking out that WEAPCO mining ship wasn't such a good idea. The Ore it collected from those asteroids is needed in weapon production.
 FACE_CHRIS
-I guess I'll have to mine some myself, then.
+Damn! I guess that means I'll have to mine some myself, then, huh?
 FACE_SID
-Be careful, Chris. Your weapons weren't designed for that sort of work and could have some devastating results.
+Yes. Be careful, Chris. Your weapons weren't designed for that sort of work and could have some devastating results.
--- a/data/brief16.txt
+++ b/data/brief16.txt
@ -1,5 +1,5 @@
 Krass Tyler
 FACE_CHRIS
-Hey, Krass! I need you to help us out with something. Phoebe and Ursula are taking out key WEAPCO plants. Can you help me create a diversion?
+Hey, Krass! I need you to help us out with something. Phoebe and Ursula are taking out key WEAPCO plants. Can you help me create a diversion by wreaking havoc a little bit away from that?
 FACE_KRASS
 Sure, I can help you out, boy. But I'll be needing my fee...
--- a/data/brief17.txt
+++ b/data/brief17.txt
@ -4,4 +4,4 @@ I've remembered something. WEAPCO is transporting some high level personnel to P
 FACE_SID
 This could be really important to our success in Sol. I'll need some cover so I can disable that ship.
 FACE_CHRIS
-Got it.
+You got it!
--- a/data/brief3.txt
+++ b/data/brief3.txt
@ -1,10 +1,10 @@
 Sid Wilson
 FACE_CHRIS
-Missile boats?
+Wow! Missile boats?
 FACE_SID
-Yeah, looks like WEAPCO has decided that in order to gain better control of Spirit they'll have to bring out the big guns!
+Yup. Looks like WEAPCO is starting to take notice of your actions.
 FACE_CHRIS
-Wow! Any more information on them?
+Sounds like fun! This will really put the Firefly's fighting ability to the test!
 FACE_SID
-A single missile boats carries enough rockets to level most major cities. Try not to face them head-on and keep your distance.
+Please be careful, Chris. A single missile boat carries enough rockets to level most major cities. Try not to face them head-on, and keep your distance.

--- a/data/brief4.txt
+++ b/data/brief4.txt
@ -1,8 +1,8 @@
 Sid Wilson
 FACE_SID
-We're going to have to clear the mine field that's been building up here recently. I have a feeling that WEAPCO have deployed some miners in the area and are testing the effectiveness of the field. Removing the mines will help interplanetary traffic to start up again.
+We're going to have to get rid of the mine deployment unit around Joldar. The minefield is stopping interplanetary traffic.
 FACE_CHRIS
-Any fighters?
+Sounds kind of boring. Any fighters?
 FACE_SID
 Not at the moment, but that doesn't mean they won't turn up. Be very careful of those mines! They'll only explode when they encounter a ship that's not transmitting a WEAPCO signal. Shoot them down if they get in your way.

--- a/data/brief5.txt
+++ b/data/brief5.txt
@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 Sid Wilson
 FACE_SID
-CHRIS! We've got a major problem here! WEAPCO has decided to stop our resistance by destroying Spirit! The explosion will incinerate everything in the system! You've only got about 3 minutes to destroy the frigate before it's in range!
+We've got a major problem here! WEAPCO has decided to stop our resistance by destroying Spirit! The explosion will incinerate everything in the system! You've got to destroy that frigate before it gets in range!
 FACE_CHRIS
-Damn! I'll get right on that, then!
+Damn! I'll get right on it, then!
 FACE_SID
 We're all counting on you, Chris! But just remember - They didn't call that thing "Star Killer" just because it sounded nice!
--- a/data/brief6.txt
+++ b/data/brief6.txt
@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 Sid Wilson
 FACE_SID
-WEAPCO has many slaves in this system. If we free a large number of them, it might help to spark a rebellion. I estimate that we will need to rescue around 250 to make a difference.
+As you know, WEAPCO has many slaves in this system. If we free a large number of them, it might help to spark a rebellion. I estimate that we will need to rescue around 250 to make a difference.
 FACE_CHRIS
 Most of the slaves are working in ore mines, aren't they?
 FACE_SID
--- a/data/brief7.txt
+++ b/data/brief7.txt
@ -1,7 +1,9 @@
 (unknown)
 FACE_PHOEBE
-Help! This is an SOS! Can anyone hear me?! I was intercepted by a large WEAPCO force near Nerod! I'm in need of assistance!
-FACE_SID
-You should probably go help her out, Chris.
+Help! This is an SOS! Can anyone hear me?!
 FACE_CHRIS
-Obviously.
+I'm hearing you loud and clear! What's up?
+FACE_PHOEBE
+Oh, thank God! I was intercepted by a large WEAPCO force near Nerod! I'm in need of assistance!
+FACE_CHRIS
+I'm on my way!
--- a/data/brief8.txt
+++ b/data/brief8.txt
@ -2,4 +2,4 @@ Sid Wilson
 FACE_SID
 I've just received another SOS. This one is coming from a supply craft carrying essential medical supplies.
 FACE_CHRIS
-I'm on it.
+Alright, Tell 'em I'm on my way.
--- a/data/brief9.txt
+++ b/data/brief9.txt
@ -1,8 +1,8 @@
 Sid Wilson
 FACE_SID
-I need some resources before we leave, it'll make life a lot easier in Mordor. Problem is that the parts are hoarded by WEAPCO.
+I need some resources before we leave, it'll make life a lot easier in Mordor. Problem is that WEAPCO hoards these parts.
 FACE_CHRIS
-Where can we get the parts, then?
+Where can we get them, then?
 FACE_SID
 There's a big shipment of them nearby. I can disable the supply craft carrying them; I just need you to give me some cover while I do it.
 FACE_CHRIS
--- a/data/cutscene0.dat
+++ b/data/cutscene0.dat
@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ gfx/spirit.jpg
 FACE_NONE
 While escaping with his newly acquired Firefly, Chris Bainfield is intercepted by a WEAPCO patrol...
 FACE_CHRIS
-Damn, these things just won't give up, will they?
+These things just won't give up, will they?
 FACE_CHRIS
 What a dilemma! I'm not all that familiar with this ship's controls, but I can't let this patrol reach my rendezvous point...
 FACE_CHRIS
--- a/data/cutscene1.dat
+++ b/data/cutscene1.dat
@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ gfx/sol.jpg
 FACE_NONE
 A few hours later, in the Sol system, news has already spread of Chris Bainfield's heroic actions. The commander of WEAPCO's navy considers his options.
 FACE_KLINE
-The Emperor will not be pleased! Spirit is now a free star system thanks to that interfering rebel pilot!
+The Emperor will not be pleased. Spirit is now a free star system thanks to that interfering rebel pilot.
 FACE_KLINE
 It was reported that he was able to take down one of our most powerful frigates in under 3 minutes!
 FACE_KLINE
--- a/data/cutscene2.dat
+++ b/data/cutscene2.dat
@ -24,10 +24,8 @@ Aren't there a lot of WEAPCO slaves in this system?
 FACE_SID
 Correct. It's got one of the highest mortality rates in the galaxy.
 FACE_CHRIS
-Well, that's no good! We'll have to do something about that, then.
+You think we can use that to our advantage?
 FACE_SID
-Just remember that we won't be in Spirit anymore and you may run into WEAPCO patrols while travelling.
+I think so. I'll come up with a plan of action. Just remember that we won't be in Spirit anymore and you may run into WEAPCO patrols while travelling.
 FACE_CHRIS
-We may actually be able to use that to our advantage. You thinking what I'm thinking?
-FACE_SID
-I sure am. I'll come up with a plan of action.
+Sounds like fun!
--- a/data/cutscene4.dat
+++ b/data/cutscene4.dat
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 FACE_SID
-Chris, what happened?! Are you okay?!
+What happened back there, Chris? All of our communications were jammed.
 FACE_CHRIS
 We took down the WEAPCO mining vessel and then I was jumped by a man claiming to be Kline Kethlan.
 FACE_SID
--- a/data/cutscene6.dat
+++ b/data/cutscene6.dat
@ -21,7 +21,7 @@ FACE_CHRIS
 Sorry folks, we just lost our bargaining chip.
 FACE_SID
 Knowing how cut throat WEAPCO is I doubt it would have made a difference anyway.
-FACE_CHRIS
+FACE_SID
 Sol is going to be difficult. I've heard they have a lot of heavy defenses on the outer planets.
 FACE_PHOEBE
 We'll have to start there then.
--- a/data/script11.txt
+++ b/data/script11.txt
@ -4,61 +4,55 @@ FACE_PHOEBE
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 Ummm... something about this doesn't look right! They should be offering more resistance than this!

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+-8
 FACE_PHOEBE
 -1
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 DAMMIT! It's a trap! Come on, Chris, we have to leave NOW!!

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+-9
 -1
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+-13
 FACE_SID
 -1
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 Chris, wh...

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+-15
 FACE_KLINE
 -1
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 So finally I meet the man who has been causing us so much trouble!

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+-20
 FACE_CHRIS
 -1
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-Why can't I...
+I see you've jammed up my warp drive. Who are you?

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-FACE_KLINE
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-0
-Don't bother trying to run away like your friend there. I've nullified your warp drive.
-
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-FACE_CHRIS
-1
-0
-Who are you?
-
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 I am Kline Kethlan. And I am here to put to a stop to your worthless little crusade!

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+FACE_CHRIS
+-1
+0
+Kline Kethlan, huh? You sure sound confident.
+
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 FACE_KLINE
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 Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide, and no one to help you! This will certainly be interesting...

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--- a/data/script23.txt
+++ b/data/script23.txt
@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ I'm a mercenary, what do you expect?! WEAPCO hired me to do a job, just like you
 FACE_CHRIS
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 0
-Good point. I guess I was a fool to expect anything else.
+Good point. It would be foolish to expect anything else.

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 FACE_KRASS
--- a/data/script26.txt
+++ b/data/script26.txt
@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 FACE_CHRIS
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-WEAPCO is finished, Kline! You have nowhere to run, nowhere to hide, and no one to help you.
+WEAPCO is finished, Kethlan! You have nowhere to run, nowhere to hide, and no one to help you.

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 FACE_KLINE